Creative Copy Challenge #24

21 Mar 2010 Leave a Comment

by mcthomas007 in Articles, Fiction Tags: ARTICLE, creative copy, Fiction

Creative Copy Challenge #24.

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Sweat poured off Gregg’s face, the Demerol was wearing off.  ”What are your scanners picking up?”  he asked Jesse.
“I’m picking up a Knucklehead at 100 paces, moving toward us, infiltration of our perimeter was at 0900 hours.  God, they smell.  Tell me again why do they call them knuckleheads?”
“I guess you haven’t seen one yet.  Get ready and don’t scare the beast.  You think they smell now, if it takes a piss, we’ll need our gas masks.”  Gregg’s grip on the crowbar tightened as he hedged forward.  He looked back as Jesse hesitated.  ”Pansy,” Gregg whispered moving on toward the prehistoric creature.
“Freak.” Jesse retorted as he inched forward behind Gregg, his eyes clued to the vegetation the animal used as cover.  Suddenly,  it emerged in full view, its cranial cap knotted like the knuckles of a fist.  Jesse back tracked crushing dry leaves and twigs with strangled unstressed syllables of expletives rising in his throat.
“Quiet!”  Gregg hissed but it was too late.  The noise startled the beast.  It raised its massive head in fear.  The sizzle of acidic urine created a toxic cloud of an unimaginable stench.  Gregg fumbled for his mask in vain as winds blew the noxious fumes to their location within seconds.
The large reptile approached the two inert bodies, just feet apart.  It leaned its snout toward the first and sniffed.  Coughing and sneezing, it shook its massive head to clear away the foul odor from its nostrils before fleeing back into the forest.